Good NameThe there are others that are a bit more distracting.
Butt brothers? That would explain why Buzzard hasn't nailed Chola.A little farther down the page.
Ah. So she might get nailed yet.People who only know the Mad About You show will get the next one.
Bounce? Why do you gotta say bounce?Then she has notes on a separate sheet of paper.
This part could be better. Rewrite. Make it less crappy.
Regina get mentioned as being part of a guild, but before we learned she is a server. Wait. Now I'm confused. See me in person for this one, preferably without pants.
Yup. All in red pen. I think I could sell this version for more than the clean version.